Here is a sample band 9 task 2 essay on the topic of student behaviour.
In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
In numerous nations educational institutions are facing serious difficulties with the conduct of their pupils. This essay will suggest that poor parenting is the root cause of this phenomenon and submit that a public awareness campaign is the most viable solution, followed by a reasoned conclusion.
The principal cause of poor discipline in schools is poor discipline at home. Many mothers and fathers either do not have the time or the skills required to teach their youngsters the value of manners and respecting authority. This results in many young people not listening to their teachers, being rude and actively rebelling against rules and regulations. For example, a recent study by Cambridge University found that 1 in 3 teenagers would refuse to comply with a rule if they didn’t agree with it, compared to just 1 in 8 in a similar study in 1990.
The most practical solution to this problem is a government sponsored awareness campaign. An effective advertising campaign could warn of the dangers of misbehaviour and hopefully raise awareness amongst the public. For example, the United Kingdom recently lobbied their citizens to teach their children about the importance of respecting teachers and this resulted in a dramatic improvement.
In summary, widespread negative behaviour in the classroom has been caused by caregivers not instilling the values of deference and civility in their offspring; however this can be tackled through a public education programme that promotes these values. It is also recommended that people should attend parenting classes before their child starts kindergarten.
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This is an excellent essay. However, considering this essay, I would like to ask that is it a nice idea to add a new idea in conclusion?
It sounds like a nice idea, but it definitely won’t improve your score! You should use your conclusion to reinforce the points you made in the rest of your essay. This method is what the examiner will expect and is the most effective way of writing a strong conclusion.
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There is only one cause and solution specified, but in the question, causes and solutions are mentioned. Shouldn’t there be more than 1 ideas.
One is all you need to meet the task requirements!
when it says causes and solutions , means we have to write at least two problems and gave two solutions for that . correct me if m wrong
No, you only need to discuss one problem and solution in order to meet the task requirements. Anything else is redundant!
Without seeing the answer i had tried. Can u please check my task 2? Institutions are facing issues with pupils behavior in several countries. This essay suggests that competetion among peers is the major cause and making a comfortable environment in schools must be a part of teachers. It is clear that the comparsion between the students is on the rise. Parents and teachers are forcing them to obtain better results in comparison to their fellowmates. No doubt, each student has its own capibility to prove there work so, no one cannot work under pressure. As a result, this would… Read more »
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