This question was recently on the IELTS academic paper in Vietnam. The topic is childcare.
Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Below there are two essays. One of them received a very high band score and one of them did not. Read them and think about which one is good, which one needs to improve and why.
I will post tomorrow with the answers and provide some feedback on both examples.
Essay 1
Some argue that when parents are at work, close relations provide the best care to young children, while others believe day care centres offer a better service. It is agreed that while some relatives take care of youngsters extremely well, childcare professionals offer a better overall service. This essay will first discuss the merits of family members looking after ‘pre-schoolers’, secondly an analysis of childcare centres’ services, followed by a reasoned conclusion.
Many parents in full-time employment prefer to leave their young ones with grandparents and siblings when they are at work. This is often a trust issue, as the parents feel their child will be safer with someone from within the family nucleus. For example, a recent study showed that 62% of working mothers prefer a member of the immediate family to provide care when they are work. However, most kin are not trained childcare professionals and may not have the skills required to fully nurture a child.
Daycare centres may be a better option due to the fact that most of their staff are highly skilled professionals. Many of their staff are highly trained and have diplomas in child development. For instance, if you want a job in a Montessori school, they will insist that you are fully qualified, with many of their staff having degrees in early years development. In spite of this, there have been recent high profile cases of abuse within these establishments which makes some parents wary.
In summary, although there are some issues involving trust, as long as parents vet each school properly, the high level of service provided by daycare professionals trumps that of unqualified family members.
Essay 2
Nowadays, childcare centres are a very hot topic and many parents are talking about their controversial issue. It is without precedence that so many mums and dads are now in the global working marker, caused in part by the remarkable phenomena of globalization that creeps in to society with ever more vigilance day by day.
I think that it is a crying shame that so many loving mothers and fathers have to leave their baby with a childcare centre. The baby will pine and crave for the affections of its mother and this may lead to the baby have developmental issues, such as learning and behavioral difficulties further down the line in later life. Moreover, these centres have been shown to be shoddy operators with many incidences of malpractices, such as neglect and physical and mental abuse damaging forever the true spirit of the infant.
So what about the grandparents? Many grandparents look forward to the day they can relax and put their feet up without the distraction of unruly children. However, many grandparents are totally committed to the welfare of their grandchildren and love to see their loved ones, lighting up their sense of personality in an unambiguous fashion.
In conclusion, it is no wonder how many parents have to leave their children at home while they try to pay off mortgages and credit card bills brought about by the current geo-political set up and burgeoning financial system of developing countries. I for one will stay at home with my kids and will therefore not require the service of professionals or next of kin.
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18 Comments on "Examples of Task 2 Discussion Essays"
2nd essay is informal having complexities while first one is in order ..structure is also fine ..vocab is normal but acceptable …how many bands first can secure ?
Despite I highly agreed with the second one essay, I have to concord with that the first one was closer to the parameters of an essay, the second one was too colloquial and very personal…
Essay 1 is pretty well written as essay 2 is less satisfactory from its introduction
which is quite irrelevant
Essay 1 follows what you always taught to students.
Essay 2 is informal and a bit vague too.